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many people hold the view that it is better to buy their home rather than rent it. do you agree or disagree

#people #home #rent
A number of
people
 believe that buying a home is better than renting it.
This
 writer disagrees with
this
 statement. Because it is cheaper than buying a dwelling.
Moreover
, renting a home is more mobility than another one. It must be understood that renting a
house
 is a good financial choice for
people
 who can not earn a large. Because a
house
 in recent years
been
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 criminally expensive and is increasing rapidly day after day, especially in the city. On average, normal
people
 can buy a residence without debt after 8 or 10 years of working. Renting a
house
 can cost about 10 or 15% of the price of a
house
, they can
also
 pay it monthly and can
also
 keep it for another future plan or for other important expenses. Another point worth considering
that is
 renting a
house
 is more mobility than buying it. It is suitable for
people
 whose jobs are not fixed or who want to change their life location regularly. There are so many procedures to change the home and it makes
people
 not want to do it after they know about that thing,
,
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furthermore
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 it is more difficult to sell a second-hand
house
 and it takes too much time to do that. In conclusion, there are more advantages for lease a
house
 than buying it because it is cheaper and more mobility than buying a
house
.
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