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In the past most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantage and disadvantage of living in a small community?

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In the past
people
 lived in a small countryside and everyone knew each other, but nowadays most
people
 live in a big city and don'
t
 know many
people
. It used to be good that
people
 used to live in
a small villages
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a small village
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 and know each other because when they needed help or needed a loan, they could take it from their
neighbors
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neighbours
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. And if they were in a hurry to work, they could entrust their child
him
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.
Besides
 nowadays
people
 live in the big cities and don'
t
 know many
people
 there the best part of it is that no one will bother you or interfere in your affairs,and if I do something like that there you will easily carry out your plans
with out
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without
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any doubts about what
people
 will say.
However
,living in a village where everyone knows is not always good. You can don'
t
 what you want. If you like under the
supervising
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 of
neighbors
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neighbours
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 and acquaintances.
Also
 living in big cities where you don'
t
 know many
people
 has some disadvantages.
For example
, if you need help with something you don'
t
 know who to ask for help and you can be very lonely. It's amazing that some
people
 like to socialize with
people
 whether their living space is big or small but not all
people
 are like that and some
people
 prefer to be alone. I think they should pay more attention. In conclusion, it is good and bad sides to living in the countryside and big city. The important thing is that you good feel there.
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