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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population age 65 and above in three countries.

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This
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 table illustrates the percentage of citizens aged 65 and above in Canada,
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 and England from 1998 to 2030.
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,
it is clear that
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 the proportion of the population is increasing
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all the time in every country.
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, it is predicted that the number of people living in these countries will be increased by around 10% in 2030 than 1998.
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Germany
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 has the highest number of citizens in all these years,
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 the UK has the lowest.
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, the upgrade in the proportion of the population in the UK increases slightly more than in other countries.
On the other hand
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,
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 and Canada show the same pattern of growth in the count of civilians. Though,
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1998 Canada showed the rate as 16%,
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 the difference between these countries in the same year was 4%. In 2030 it is expected that the number of civilians living in
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 will be 10% higher than England nationals, at 30%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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