The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The table illustrates the
rates
of what
men
and
women
who do not work did in their time in the previous year in the United Kingdom.
Overall
, the majority of
women
spent their
mornings
doing Housework,
while
the largest segment of
men
chose to use morning time to find a job.
Moreover
, none of the
women
did sports or stayed in bed in the afternoons and a tiny proportion of
men
drank in the
mornings
. It is obvious that seeking a job was the priority of most unemployed males as 22% the first part of the day searching for work,
in contrast
to females around half of them spent their
mornings
doing housework.
Moreover
, the
rates
for
men
and
women
who preferred to do morning shopping are close to 20% for the first and 26% for the latter.
Moreover
, both genders showed very small
rates
for morning and afternoon drinking only 2% of
men
drank in the
mornings
and 3% in the afternoon,
while
1% of
women
drank in the
mornings
and afternoons. The social life of non-working males was very humble as only 6% visited their friends and relatives in the morning and no more than 12% in the afternoons ,
while
women
were more active as the
rates
were 10% and 17% respectively.
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