A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Previously, in the time of our ancestors,
the
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simplicity was
on
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peak. There was no trend of showing off
one
's
assests
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assets
.
People
use to marry as per children's choice and showed no demands at all.
However
, in
21st
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century we observe
people
that do as much show off as they can. The old traditions
seems
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no longer attractive to anyone these days. Only expensive items are what
people
find
intresting
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interesting
and judge someone's status over it. In
this
essay, I will discuss why I agree
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To begin
with,
this
is very sad to say but we are living in a society where if we are nice to someone and treat them with kindness, there is no way they will be happy to help.
However
, if we showcase our properties and status,
this
will impress them.
For instance
, recently I visited SBP and showed
a
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very graceful
behavior
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towards everyone and asked for guidance yet no
one
was willing to help.
Whereas
in the same area a person that was facing a similar issue, his work was solved in
few
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minutes,
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reson
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reason
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NAB.
Furthermore
, nowadays
people
make friends in high society so they can
benifit
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benefit
from them later. No
one
is interested in loyalty these days, they only look for wealthy
people
so they can have
good
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reputation and
have
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respect.
For example
, a very famous incident that took place in India. Two friends who were always together for
eachother
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each other
.
One
of them was poor
while
the other was rich. Once the rich friend was in
severe
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emergency
while
the poor friend didn't show up for help
becuase
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because
he was never loyal to him.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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