You recenlty organized a party for your company at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter describe the party and how it went explain why you were pleased with the hotel's service suggest some improvements that the hotel could make

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Dear Sir or Madam, Greetings, I am writing

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letter to you with regard to the latest party you organized, I am so delighted to inform you that it was a remarkable event,

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, you made me proud of my appearance on

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occasion

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my colleagues.

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, the buffet service was excellent, all

plats

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plates

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were delicious and fresh.

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, you followed my instructions about vegetarian meals, and

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this

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everybody was pleased and satisfied.

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, drinks were

flavourable

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favourable

whether hot or cold with

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mixed fresh fruit.

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, your staff are welcoming and cooperative every single touch showed how much you are professional. It is a matter of fact that there is nothing perfect everything could need some

improvments

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improvements

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even though the service you provided was sufficient and ideal, I would like to suggest that women's bathrooms need additional care

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as extra cleaning tools and lighted mirrors. I would like to thank

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much

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for you

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you

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exhibited high-quality and professional services. Yours sincerely, John Adam.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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7 paragraphs

169 words

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You recenlty organized a party for your company at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter describe the party and how it went explain why you were pleased with the hotel's service suggest some improvements that the hotel could make

The average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010

With internet improvement people can & opinions on certain goods or service that they purchased. Is this good or bad thing?.

Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology, and business. why do you think that is? what could be done to encourage more people to take interest in arts?