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Due to the effects of globalization, the culture of some countries are influenced by others. Some people think this is a positive process. Others think this is a threat to cultural identity. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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No Doubt,
people
 are migrating from
one
 place to another for a better life at a fast pace. But,
along with
 them, they are
also
 getting their
culture
 and habits.
One
 group of schools thought that
this
 is a good thing as
people
 are sharing positive things about their community with each other,
while
; others think
this
 was genocide. Changes are meant for society and we all need to evolve with time. Talking about
positive
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 side, Multiculturism always leads to the growth and diversification of the economy. When
people
 from different ethnicity live together, they get to know
about
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each other. I think
this
 is a good source to increase our knowledge and mind horizons. We all are humans
first,
then
 we got divided into different groups. Despite
of
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so many benefits;
Nevertheless
, some
people
 are still against it.
This
 may be because of love for their
culture
 or maybe something else.
According to
 them, they don't have any hate for
one
's
culture
, but, by living together, they don't want to lose their
culture
. Most of the
people
 in
this
 section are old aged
people
 and after living their whole life following their own
culture
, when they saw changes happening, they just can't survive the pain. We may call it old fashion but
this
 is natural. In the end, I would like
to conclude
 that changes are a natural part of every
culture
 and we have to accept them
according to
 time.
One
 thing we never have to forget is Mankind, we are humans
first,
and
then
 we are divided into different groups. So, never let your hate kill or harm other humans.
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