Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. others, However believe that school is the place to learn this discuss both the views and give your opinion.

The debate over whether
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parents or schools should be responsible for teaching young children
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how to become
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of society is a tough one. In my opinion, it should be the best combination of household learning
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learning. In the below ,paragraphs I would
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like present how each one of them has its designated place in the mental growth of a child. The parents always play a major role in the upbringing of their little ones.
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they are
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one with whom they began to interact
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and follows their actions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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