The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.
The chart illustrates the most favourite countries for the
production
and
consumption
of electricity in 2014.
Overall
, China and
United
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the United
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States have
a
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the
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highest
rank
for that two aspects. China got
a
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the
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first
rank
of
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in
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electricity's
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electricity
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production
and
consumption
which got 5398
billion
kWh
for
production
and 5322
billion
kWh
for
consumption
. The second
rank
goes to
United
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States, which got 4099
billion
kWh
for
production
and 3866
billion
kWh
for
Consumption
. Meanwhile,
Republic
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the Republic
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of Korea
have
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the lowest
rank
got
a
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ten times lower than China which got 485.1
billion
kWh
for
production
and 449.5
billion
kWh
for
consumption
. Unlike other countries, Germany
have
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a higher expenditure rather than construction. It clearly be seen that Germany got
a
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582.5
billion
kWh
for expenditure and 526.6
billion
kWh
for construction. Russia, Japan, and India have
the
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a
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similar number, which got almost one thousand in both aspects. Meanwhile, Canada, France, and Brazil got under five
hundreds
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in that two conditions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, rank, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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  • megawatt-hour (MWh)
  • capacity
  • output
  • distribution
  • consumption
  • production
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable energy
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • trend
  • pattern
  • discrepancy
  • regional
  • anomaly
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