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The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the most favourite countries for the
production
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 and
consumption
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 of electricity in 2014.
Overall
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, China and
United
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the United
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 States have
a
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the
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 highest
rank
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 for that two aspects. China got
a
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the
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 first
rank
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of
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in
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electricity's
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electricity
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production
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 and
consumption
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 which got 5398
billion
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kWh
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 for
production
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 and 5322
billion
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kWh
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 for
consumption
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. The second
rank
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 goes to
United
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the United
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 States, which got 4099
billion
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kWh
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 for
production
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 and 3866
billion
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kWh
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 for
Consumption
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. Meanwhile,
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Korea
have
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 the lowest
rank
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 got
a
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ten times lower than China which got 485.1
billion
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kWh
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 for
production
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 and 449.5
billion
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kWh
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 for
consumption
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. Unlike other countries, Germany
have
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 a higher expenditure rather than construction. It clearly be seen that Germany got
a
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582.5
billion
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kWh
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 for expenditure and 526.6
billion
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kWh
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 for construction. Russia, Japan, and India have
the
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a
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 similar number, which got almost one thousand in both aspects. Meanwhile, Canada, France, and Brazil got under five
hundreds
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 in that two conditions.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, rank, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hour (MWh)
  • capacity
  • output
  • distribution
  • consumption
  • production
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable energy
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • trend
  • pattern
  • discrepancy
  • regional
  • anomaly
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