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Some people believe citizens should be allowed to carry handguns in order to protect themselves ,while others think this can lead to many social security problems in the society ,what is your opinion , use specific reasons to support your opinion

#people #citizens #handguns #security #society #support
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Safe guard
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 own security it is mandatory to know various
self defence
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self-defence
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 skills
such
 as boxing,
karatea
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karate
karateka
 and much more.
Am in
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an
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 opinion
citizens
 carrying
handguns
is
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threat
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 to
the
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society which is explained below. On
one
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 hand,In many
countires
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countries
 security is a major threat to its own
citizens
however
 in order to self
defenc
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defence
its
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 not
mandotory
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mandatory
 to carry the
handguns
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handgun
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,a person with good knowledge of how to protect himself/herself from
the
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robbers is a vital part by using various talents
such
 as boxing,
karatea
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karate
karateka
.
On the other hand
, if a person
carrying
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 a handgun
while
 in
the
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a
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 crowded market and if a robber
tryies
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tries
tried
trying
 to steal a handbag and the person with the handgun will commence triggering
randonmly
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randomly
in
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panic causing severe harm to
public
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the public
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 in the crow.
Few
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 months back,a video
fottage
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footage
in
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on
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the
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social media went viral.In one
the
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college in Texas a student triggered
handgun
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a handgun
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 in the class randomly and leading
several
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to several
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 deaths,
this
 is the root cause of using and
carriying
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carrying
handguns
.
To conclude
,my strongest opinion is that
citizens
 should not be entertained to use
handguns
 or any other weapon and in
turn
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citizens
 to seek designated
authroities
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authorities
 for assistance in case required.
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