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Learning English at school is often seen as important than learning loacl languages .if these are not taught may many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to insure the survival of local language and if so how?

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 the questions and give my opinion. To commence with, the importance of
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 applying to foreign universities.
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 like science, subjects and other arts subjects
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