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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiyon, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiyon, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two illustrations depict the floor plan for major reinforcements to be made in the Norbinton manufacturing area.
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, Norbinton is set to become more commercial and residential, with a feasible transportation system.
It is clear that
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 today, Norbinton comprises
of
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mainly factories and no living community.
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, two new roads are planned to be added to the current roundabout,
as well as
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 adding a smaller roundabout to the south of the current one to make junctions seamless.
In addition
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, the redevelopment will introduce housing to be in place of former factories. Ultimately, a school is expected to be built on the eastern wing, with a complementary playground being situated near it, between the housing area and the river.
Furthermore
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, shops and medical centres will be constructed on either side of the road located on the north exit. Transportation to the newly refurbished farmland across the river will be made simple with the bridge that connects both ends. To make way for the bridge, farmland is relocated to the east. The town and river remain the same as no alterations will be conducted.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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