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Changes in the town of Dalton between 1815 and 2015

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The two maps illustrate how the time of Dalton changed over two centuries from 1815 to 2015. They clearly show that there have been a considerable number of changes and developments during
this
 time
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 and that a large number of buildings have been constructed. Turning to the map in 1815 we can clearly see that the town was much smaller at that time. There are only a few houses to the north of Dalton
Hall
 and
Hall
 farm, and most of the map is taken up by trees and forests to the north of the River Dal. Agriculture is a prominent feature of the landscape, with horses and cattle predominant.
However
, two centuries later, all of
this
 has changed dramatically. The number of houses has more than doubled, a school has been built and Dalton
Hall
hall
 has become a hotel, close to the new airport which has replaced the old
Hall
 Farm. Another major change is the bridge and the road over the stream, which leads to be industrial area and the new hospital.
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Task Achievement: 5
Address the specific changes in the town over the time period and provide specific details on the developments. Avoid vague statements.
Coherence and Cohesion: 5
Ensure that the introduction and conclusion clearly frame the discussion of the changes in the town from 1815 to 2015. Use linking words and phrases to improve coherence.

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