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The graphs show the size of the Ozone layer hole in Antarctic and three productions of damaged gases to the Antarctic Ozone from 1980 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs show the size of the Ozone layer hole in Antarctic and three productions of damaged gases to the Antarctic Ozone from 1980 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the information
of
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 disruption in the Ozone layer above Antarctica.It
also
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 shows three different gases which
making
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made

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 it worst in the
years
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 1980 to 2000.
Overall
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, it can be said that as the period passed the damage in the Ozone layer over Antarctic people
also
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 saw an upward trend . In its addition , there were other factors
also
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 involved in the harmful cause which destroyed the same.
To begin
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 with,only between 1990 and 1995 there was less effect seen in the damage done as compared to the other three
years
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 (1980,185 and 2000).The harm started at about 300 thousand square km and reached above 3000 thousand square km.
Moreover
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,in the same
years
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 from 1980 to 2000 there were three distinct gases namely CFC-11,CFC-12 and N20 were seen in vandalizing the Ozone. Gas A declined its effect as the
years
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 passed and went down to negligible
while
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 gas B kept its effect as it is.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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