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The bar charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts compare the occupation status of
graduates
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 and postgraduates in the UK who did not
work
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 as a full-time
employee
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employees
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 after graduation, in 2008.
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, most of both
graduates
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 and postgraduates students decided to continue their studies,
whereas
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 working as a volunteer was the least popular option among them. If we look at the chart for
graduates
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, it is evident that almost 30,000 continued to study. The second most popular destination was to
work
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 in a part-time job, by 17,735. Only a small number of them decided to participate in voluntary
work
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, with 3,500. It is
also
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 notable that marginally above 15,000
graduates
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 were unemployed back
then
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, in 2008. Looking at the occupation status of the postgraduates who did not get involved in full-time
work
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, it is noticeable that
although
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 the number of people whose status was described in the chart was considerably less than
graduates
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, the ranking followed the same pattern. To explain more, most of them decided to study
further
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, 2,752. The second most chosen path was to be occupied with a part-time job, at 2,535. Only 345 people decided to
work
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 voluntarily,
while
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 1,625 of them were labelled as "unoccupied".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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