Government should spend money on railways than roads. To what extent so you agree or disagree with the statement.

People
believes
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that
,
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it is important for Government to use more resources in constructing railways
instead
of roads.
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essay
agree
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with the above state in the sense that it will ease the transportation of certain goods and reduce traffic jam. In recent times , roads do not
last
long
due to
heavy weight
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vehicles and goods being transported on
daily
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basis. These trends
forms
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pod
hooles
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holes
which causes accident and loss of lives and properties.
these incidence
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can be
avioded
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avoided
if more railways are being built that will convey products which exert more weight on road tracks,
such
as granite,
coal
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and coal
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.
Pertoleum
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Petroleum
and containers,
hence
reducing the formation of pod holes and decreasing the
occurance
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occurrence
of accidents.
Furthermore
,
constructing
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of
railway
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a railway
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will be more beneficial in enhancing
good
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a good
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traffic system which will ease stress and improve the activities of daily living of the common man,
that is
to say, there be
puntuality
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punctuality
among
worker
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in their various place of work and parents can go home early.
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, in some big cities in
devloping
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developing
countries in
africa
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, people spend hours
on
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traffic,
thus
going about their businesses late which
have
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negatuvde
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negative
effects on them and their families.
In addition
, linking railways across states make it easy for
inter state
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travel, whereby family member
friends
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can
vist
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visit
each other
hence
maintaining relationships and bonding. Conclusively, it is of uttermost
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for money should be allocated
in
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building
railway
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railways
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instead
roads for there will be
reduction
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in expressway accidents,
gridlock
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.and enhance household relationships.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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