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The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 bar chart illustrates British
Emigration
 to five countries from 2004 to 2006.the
overall
 trend shown in the data is a steep rise in
AUSTRAALIA
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AUSTRALIA
,
coupled with
 a decline in NEW
ZEALAND
. If we compare
between
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AUSTRALIA and SPAIN notice that in 2005 the
emigration
 in AUSTRALIA reached
highs
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high
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50
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of 50
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 thousand,
in addition
, in 2007 there was a slight fall in
emigration
, but
emigration
an
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increased in 2004.
For example
,
the
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emigration
 in 2005 experienced a slight fall. If we compare the
emigration
 of Spain to the
emigration
 of FRANCE, we notice that there was
shot
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 up from 20 to 40 in 2005.
Furthermore
, in SPAIN there was stability during the period from 2004 to 2005. Unlike in
2007
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 we can see to
plunged
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. It is interesting to notice that
the
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in NEW
ZEALAND
 the emendation in decreased.
Such
 as in 2007 reaching 20
also
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and also
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 in 2006 to 21. spcequntly, there was a sudden drop in
USA
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the USA
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 by 2007 but in 2006
the
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emigration
 improves in UAS,
whereas
 in NEW
ZEALAND
was
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 roes.
For instance
, in 2004 there was
go
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 down but in
USA
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the USA
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 experienced
rise
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a rise
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. In conclusion,
although
AUSTRAALIA
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AUSTRALIA
 over the period given an increase in yearly income, the yearly income of NEW
ZEALAND
 a reduction.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emigration, zealand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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