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The charts give information on the amount of exports moving through water damp port in Holland, to various global destinations in 2002 and 2012, and also the rates of tax imposed On these exports by the receiving countries. Write a report summerizing the information. Select and describe the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The charts give information on the amount of exports moving through water damp port in Holland, to various global destinations in 2002 and 2012, and also the rates of tax imposed On these exports by the receiving countries. Write a report summerizing the information. Select and describe the main features and make comparison where relevant.
As an introduction, the tables demonstrate the quantity of exporting from a certain harbour in Holland to a few
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 between 2002 and 2012
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 and the implemented rate of
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 on these items by those
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.
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, it can be seen that the
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 was getting low
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 the rising amount of goods, except in the USA where the
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 was reduced even with declining exports.
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 with, the general trend for exports was to reduce over these 10-year periods from about 100 to 500
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tonnes
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.
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, in the USA the amount declined from 4200 to 3900
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tonnes
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, and in Europe, the figures dropped from 6900 to 6400
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tonnes
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.
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, in China and Latin America, the quantity went down from 100
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tonnes
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 and 300
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tonnes
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 to lie at 2300
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tonnes
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 and 1500
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tonnes
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 in 2012 respectively.
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, Asia Pacific and Australia showed a significant rise in imports almost 3 times from the beginning, to end at 2550 and 2300
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tonnes
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 in 2012 respectively.
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, a similar quantity was shipped to other
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 and the total export was a little bit higher than that of 2002 in 2012 which was 18600
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tonnes
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. The imposed
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 on these products was increased by 1 to 3% in many
countries
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, namely Europe, China and Latin America. Anyhow, a drop of 3% in
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 can be observed in Asia Pacific and Australia, even though the
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 of other
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 remained stable throughout the period.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, tax, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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