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There is a problem today that copyright materials such as music, films and books are freely available on the internet with the result that the owners of the works lose money. Do you feel that this is a good or bad thing?

#copyright #materials #music #films #books #internet #owners #works #money
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, piracy and
stolling
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strolling
stealing
content
 from
internet
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 without giving credit to its ownership
is
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are
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incresing
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increasing
 these days.
While
following
this
 trend
assisting
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people
 to entertain and enlighten themselves,
however
, it arise concern for the creators by
loosing
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 money
of
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from
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 their research and
harwork
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hard work
artwork
 which will be discussed in
following
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the following
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. The approach of easily getting the information and
content
 can be
attrective
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attractive
 for some
people
 by doing minimal effort on
internet
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. Without considering that they are taking advantage of someone's imagination and research
to
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apply
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by giving no
credits
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credit
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 to its owner . Websites,
for example
,
Z-liberary
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Z-library
has
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have
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offering
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offered
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people
 to download almost every type of available book without any subscription or charges and wrongdoers
making
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 more money than the actual publisher.
In
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result
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a result
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, years of research and
hardwork
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hard work
 of a writer
goes
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go
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into
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in
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 vain with a single click of someone.
In addition
,
this
 easily
accessable
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accessible
 stuff is changing the perspective of society and
people
 are becoming less imaginative
as well as
 lazy that decreasing to consider the actual value of available
content
.
In other words
, piracy is a crime but still individuals, especially
young
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the young
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 generation prefer to watch
movie
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movies
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 on streaming weblinks without giving money but sensitive information without considering its dark side.
While
 producers of those
high budgeted
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 movies
goes
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go
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 into debt. In conclusion,
internet
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the internet
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 helps
people
 by entertaining and proving information whichever they want without any
suscription
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prescription
 or membership,
On the other hand
,
owner
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the owner
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 who has
legal
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 right to publish their
content
 are facing financial burden with
this
 negative approach of
internet
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.
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