"the graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three Metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant"

"the graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three Metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant"
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The line chart illustrates the differences
of
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in
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price
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prices
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in
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of
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copper, nickel and zinc in the
year
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of
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apply
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2014.
Overall
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, there was a slight decrease
of
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in
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nickel and copper
prices
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,
whereas
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the
prices
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of zinc increased slowly.
Furthermore
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, there was a general fluctuation in
prices
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but the first half of the
year
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witnessed somewhat expensive
prices
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.
In contrast
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,
the
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from July and afterwards, the
prices
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were a bit cheaper and started going down till December. Regarding
the
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apply
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copper
prices
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, it has overwhelmingly
decline
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declined
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by around 9% from January to July. It has slightly grown up by 2% after 2 months,
then
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remained the same
September
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in September
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and
finally
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ending
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ended
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up with a
grew
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up of 3% from October to December. The Nickel
prices
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was
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were
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generally fluctuating as it was approximately
collapse
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collapsed
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by less than% till June and moderately returned to almost the same price
at the end
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of the
year
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.
Finally
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, Zinc
prices
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opened the
year
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by
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with
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a surprising 2% climb
however
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it
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they
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noticed a gradual decline in June and almost remained steady until October. There was
an
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a
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notable rise in
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last
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the last
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3 months by around 4%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, prices with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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