An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why are more people choosing to have operation to change the way they look? Do you think this a positive or negative development?

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surgery

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modern world.

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of the population

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deciding to have

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cosmetic

surgery

, to enhance their physical

appearance

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I will discuss the negative

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development

of having

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surgery

. In

this

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current

modern world where technology is advancing continuously. There are a lot of sophisticated

equipments

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equipment

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and devices that can

allter

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alter

the physical

appearance

of a person.

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has a negative impact

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society

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because

it gives pressure and

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people especially

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easily influences our younger generations. They are not content

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their

appearance

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leads them to undergo

surgery

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a student who is being bullied in school

due to

her

appearance

might develop low

self esteem

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self-esteem

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and depression.

Due to

this

, she might decide to do the operation.

This

might solve her problem but, in the long

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the side effect of

this

will appear. It might cause more harm to her

overall

appearance

and health. There are lots of

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regarding failed operations and the end result was deformity of the operated sites. Often the operated

persons

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person's

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appearance

was much more

diffferent

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different

than their previous one.

On the other hand

, there is a good side to

this

.

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, a person who was involved in an accident

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can have a restorative operation.

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surgery

should be out of

necesiity

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necessity

. I believe that a good family upbringing should start inside the family. Parents should teach their children to be satisfied with what they have, be confident with who they are and not be pressured by the demands and whim of their environment.