The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
The two data
illustrates
the average daily Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
temperature
in degreea
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degrees
degree
celcius
and Correct your spelling
celsius
average
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the average
numver
of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
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number
Overall
, what stands out from the chart is the fluctuation of temperature
and average rainfall in both cities each month.
In the month of january
Canbera's Change the capitalization
January
minimun
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minimum
temperature
was approximately 12 degrees
and the maximum was around 25 degrees
. On the other hand
, Brisbane experienced a temperature
ranging from 20 to 25 degrees
. Canberras' temperature
drop
and reached its lowest point in July at around 2 Wrong verb form
dropped
degrees
celcius
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celsius
then
, depicts a steadily increasing temperature
that hovers around 20% in december
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December
On the other
hand
Brisbanes' Add a comma
,hand
temperature
shows a sudden decrease in temperature
in february
. The coldest Change the capitalization
February
temperature
was just around 10 degrees
in the montth
of July Correct your spelling
month
then
, subsequently
increased and reaches its hottest temperature
at around 30 degrees
in december
.
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December
In contrast
, Brisbane accounts for the highest rainfall in february
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February
while
Canberra is the smallest most
of the months.Change preposition
in most
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