The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
The two data
illustrates
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illustrate
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the average daily
temperature
in
degreea
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degrees
degree
celcius
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celsius
and
average
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the average
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numver
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number
of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
Overall
, what stands out from the chart is the fluctuation of
temperature
and average rainfall in both cities each month. In the month of
january
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January
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Canbera's
minimun
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minimum
temperature
was approximately 12
degrees
and the maximum was around 25
degrees
.
On the other hand
, Brisbane experienced a
temperature
ranging from 20 to 25
degrees
. Canberras'
temperature
drop
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and reached its lowest point in July at around 2
degrees
celcius
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celsius
then
, depicts a steadily increasing
temperature
that hovers around 20% in
december
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December
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.
On the other
hand
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Brisbanes'
temperature
shows a sudden decrease in
temperature
in
february
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February
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. The coldest
temperature
was just around 10
degrees
in the
montth
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month
of July
then
,
subsequently
increased and reaches its hottest
temperature
at around 30
degrees
in
december
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December
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.
In contrast
, Brisbane accounts for the highest rainfall in
february
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February
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while
Canberra is the smallest
most
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in most
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of the months.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, degrees with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average daily maximum
  • average daily minimum
  • rainfall
  • degrees Celsius (°C)
  • anomalies
  • trends
  • geographic location
  • climate zones
  • seasonal changes
  • data representation
  • comparison
  • temperature range
  • weather patterns
  • statistical analysis
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