The graph below shows the population figures of different types of turtles in India between 1980 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The given graph chart represents data about 4 different
species
of turtles
in India and their population from 1980 to 2012. It can be clearly seen that Olive Ridley turtles
are rising in numbers while
others remain on the same lever
or even decreasing in population.
In 1980 all types of Correct your spelling
level
animal
have the same Fix the agreement mistake
animals
number
which is about 100. For the next 5 years
their index increased and the Add a comma
,years
number
became 110. For the following 12 years
there was a huge growth in Add a comma
,years
figure
for Olive Ridley turtles
compared to other species
. They peaked at point
of 135. Correct article usage
a point
While
Leatherback Turtles
had a steadily
fall and Change the adverb
steady
figure
in 1998 was about 90. The trend of falling Correct article usage
the figure
number
remained on this
type and in 2012 it was almost 55 species
overall
. The All Species
graph line experienced fluctuations during the whole period of time and the total number
in 2012 was 111.The same pattern was applied for
Green Change preposition
to
turtles
. In the last
year
the Add a comma
,year
overall
figure
was approximately 90.
To conclude
, the Leatherback type of turtles
experienced the
significant fall. The Correct article usage
a
number
of them became two times less. However
, Olive Ridley turtles
increased in its figure
for
about 35 .Change preposition
to
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