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The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table describes
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 the percentage used in four different
fuel
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 and other types to produce electricity in five different Asian countries during the year 2005. To summarize, in the year 2005 Malaysia and Singapore stood first in Coal & lignite
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 most of the countries least witnessed in
Hydro
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 &
wind
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. In the year 2005, Malaysia was 61% in Coal & lignite
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 lowered in Petroleum
products
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 2%.
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, Nuclear, other and
Hydro
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 &
wind
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was
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 19%, 13% and 5% respectively.
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, in Singapore Coal & lignite and
Hydro
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 &
wind
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 reaches almost
higher
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 percentage with 42% and 39% orderly and
rest
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 of them
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 insignificant.
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, in
Thailand
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 the electricity generated was maximum in Petroleum
products
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 and other, remaining other
products
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 are negligible.
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, South Korea and Japan have inclined in
Hydro
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 &
wind
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 and Nuclear with 48% and 49% admittedly. On the flip side,
lowest
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margined
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 was 3% each in Petroleum
products
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 in South Korea and Japan,
also
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 Japan has one more less value in
Hydro
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 &
wind
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hydro, wind, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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