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The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Brisk Café, by season.

The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Brisk Café, by season.
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This
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 bar chart illustrates the middle number of selected food at the Brisk cafe of
every day
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sales
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 by season. The
overall
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 trend shown in the data is a steep rise in the
winter
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 ,
coupled with
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decline
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a decline
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 in
summer
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. If we compare
between
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apply
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the Hot
coffee
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 and Iced
coffee
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 in
winter
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 and
summer
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,we notice that
the
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Hot
coffee
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 in the
winter
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it
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was much higher around 75,
while
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 Iced
coffee
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 it
was increases
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around
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to around
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 40 in the
summer
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. Comparing
between
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apply
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Iced cream and soup,it can be
clearly
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clear
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 the highest in the
winter
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 is soup,
it
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its
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sales
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by
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at
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 50,
while
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 Ice cream
lowest
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is lowest
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by
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at
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 around 25.Unlike the
sales
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 of the
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summer
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,summer
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 it was an
increased
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 in the Ice Cream by around 35,
while
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 in the soup there was a
suddlen
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sudden
 drop
by
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of
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 25. In conclusion, the bar chart show percentage of daily
sales
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 in
summer
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 and
winter
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, winter, summer, coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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