The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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The bar chart compares the percentages of Australian women and men doing regular exercise in divergent
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groups in the year 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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in all
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groups,
females
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stood the first rank except in the
ages
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15 to 24 as the youngest group.
In addition
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, the figures for
males
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and
females
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who did regular physical activity were almost the same at the
ages
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65 and over. The
percentage
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of women who did regular physical activity was higher than that of men,
while
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in the youngest
age
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group (15 to 24), the number of
males
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who did regular exercise was almost 5% more than that of
females
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with 47.7%. It is noteworthy that the biggest difference between the figures of
females
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and
males
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who exercised regularly was in the
ages
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35 to 44 with 12%. By increasing
age
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, the
percentage
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of men who did exercise regularly decreased to 39.5% in the
ages
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35 to 44. After these
ages
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, the figures for
males
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increased slightly to 46.7% which was approximately the same as that for
females
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at the
ages
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65 and over.
In addition
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, the
percentage
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of women rose gradually until the
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45 to 54 with 53.3% which was the highest
percentage
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between
males
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and
females
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among all
age
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groups and
then
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declined at the
ages
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above 65.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, females, ages, males, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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