The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar chart compares the percentages of Australian women and men doing regular exercise in divergent
age
groups in the year 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
in all
age
groups,
females
stood the first rank except in the
ages
15 to 24 as the youngest group.
In addition
, the figures for
males
and
females
who did regular physical activity were almost the same at the
ages
65 and over. The
percentage
of women who did regular physical activity was higher than that of men,
while
in the youngest
age
group (15 to 24), the number of
males
who did regular exercise was almost 5% more than that of
females
with 47.7%. It is noteworthy that the biggest difference between the figures of
females
and
males
who exercised regularly was in the
ages
35 to 44 with 12%. By increasing
age
, the
percentage
of men who did exercise regularly decreased to 39.5% in the
ages
35 to 44. After these
ages
, the figures for
males
increased slightly to 46.7% which was approximately the same as that for
females
at the
ages
65 and over.
In addition
, the
percentage
of women rose gradually until the
ages
45 to 54 with 53.3% which was the highest
percentage
between
males
and
females
among all
age
groups and
then
declined at the
ages
above 65.
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  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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