The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site
The Two maps illustrate the industrial
area
in the Town of Norbiton
,
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and the planned
future
development of the place.
Overall
, the maps
shows
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the main features
in addition
many
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comparisons between now and
future
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. Notably, the
area
in
this
town will be more modern and full of facilities.
On the other hand
, the
area
in
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the north side shows a
river
, and across the
river
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there is an
area
called Farmland. The first map
indicate
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a Norbition industrial
area
in the present.
Therefore
, it shows only factories in the surrounding. It shows three factories in the north, which are close to the
river
.
However
, there
is
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two of them in the south, one
on
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the east and two
on
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the western north
area
. The second map conduct planned
future
development in the industrial
area
in the town of Norbition, it shows more facilities like;
playground
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a playground
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in the north beside the
river
,
also
school
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a school
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in the east, shops in the west and a medical
center
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in the south. The most significant
changes
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between the present site and the planned one for the
future
is all of the factories replaced with houses.
Therefore
, the
area
will be full of new facilities that will help citizens.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "therefore".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, future, river with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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