some people think that success is the best measure of intelligence while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways.

Few people have opined that
Intelligence
can be estimated with
success
and
on the other hand
, there are others who think
success
can be measured in different ways. In
this
essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument.
Firstly
, I will shed some
lights
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on why
success
is
predominant
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factor and
secondly
, I will talk through some other factors that contribute to
measurement
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the measurement
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of
intelligence
.
Success
is a result of
efforts
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and smartness, even though if a
person
works hard, but doesn’t use his brain
then
he wouldn't be successful.
For Example
, If a student Mugg up for his exams it is
a hard work
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, and eventually he will forget it and won't be able to answer if questions are twisted. On
contrary
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, if a student
understand
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the concepts they will remember
it
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and answer
it
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well. Passing with good grades is a
success
that is
achieved by his brainpower.
Whereas
,
Success
is not only a parameter consider for
intelligence
. It can be seen and implemented in small things. Like in making
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decisions, and
also
once mental and physical health is an indicator how a
person
is emotionally intelligent. The quality of life that
person
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lives in terms of everything
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only material
also
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defines his intellect.
For Instance
, If a
person
is emotionally intelligent he will take decisions carefully and
consequently
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the results will be effective. In my opinion,
Intelligence
is an integral part of
success
, but
success
is not only the significant factor to measure it. As
,
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it can be seen through various other forms and ways.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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