The most important aim of science ought to be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the modern of today’s society
science
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people
’s
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improves
people
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health.
Science
is released it is made
the
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life become better especially healthy.When the world has
a
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epidemic or
people
hurt
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we need medicine.To make
its
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,
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scentist
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scientist
scientists
will
recheach
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research
to create them. A particular example
it
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is
COVID 19
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vaccines.Before
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released
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of vaccines many
people
died because
don’t
have antibodies to
aganist viruss
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against viruses
.With the development of
science
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many companies
has
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created vaccines and it was helped
people
create immune to against
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viruss
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viruses
virus
.Because of reasons, we can go outside but
don’t
wear a mask, students go to school every day
instead
of learning online.
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,
science
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don’t
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apply
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the right things the result will
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heavily
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such
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, it
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explain the phenomenon of superstition. For
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at night it will be difficult to breathe.Research shows
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photosynesic
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photosynthesis
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absorb co2, wasting o2 in the morning and vice versa.So we breathe by co2 in the evening
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in
people
think have ghost In conclusion,
science
makes our life better.
Besides
, it clearly the phenomenon of superstition we
don’t
explain before
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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