Some businesses now say that no-one can smoke cigarettes in any of their offices some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree with this?

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active and passive smoker health. In my opinion, I align with the governments and businesses that are banned

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Varied vocabulary

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Topic Vocabulary:

public health
second-hand smoke
respiratory diseases
healthcare costs
productivity
fire hazards
environmental advantages
aesthetics
non-smokers
personal freedom
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