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The best way to motivate employees is to increase their salaries. Do you agree with this statement? Are there any other ways to encourage employees to work more efficiently?

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’ salaries is one of the many methods through which companies try to encourage their people to work harder and smarter. I disagree that increasing salaries is the most effective way to enhance employee motivation and that there are other non-monetary incentives which can generate better results. I do not believe that the best method for encouraging staff to perform productively is by raising their pay.
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, If the
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' salary level is high enough, raising it
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 would not motivate them to enhance their performance.
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, If they keep on raising their monetary incentive, there will come a point where it will become uneconomical for them. As an alternative to increasing salaries, there are other ways to motivate the workforce to increase their job productivity that includes non-monetary benefits and annual bonuses. By providing them with club membership, staff and their families will utilize their facilities and
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 will, in turn, enable them to perform better in their job.
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, the more effort
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 will make to improve their performance at work the more profit the companies will generate.
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,
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 will receive better annual profit-based bonuses. In conclusion, I believe, that increasing pay is not the best method to motivate
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. Increasing pay will have a negative impact on the employer because at one point it will become uneconomical for them. There are other non-monetary ways through which staff performance can be improved. By providing them with benefits
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 as club membership and annual profit-based bonuses they will be encouraged to endeavor to their best ability ultimately improving their productivity.
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