the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee nd tea buying and drinking habits
The provided chart depicts the outcome of research on
people
who consume Use synonyms
coffee
and tea whether buying or drinking in five cities in Australia during the Use synonyms
last
four weeks.
It is clearly observed from the graph that Linking Words
people
had a stronger willingness to go to a café for these drinks. Whilst, fewer of them preferred to purchase fresh Use synonyms
coffee
during the same period.
The figure for the public who brought fresh Use synonyms
coffee
in Sydney was approximately as equal to that of Melbourne about 45%. Whilst, Use synonyms
people
from Hobart had less willing to purchase fresh Use synonyms
coffee
about 40%. Use synonyms
In addition
, the proportions of Linking Words
people
in Brisbane and Adelaide who bought fresh Use synonyms
coffee
were as equal to each other just under 35%. Use synonyms
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For
people
who bought instant Use synonyms
coffee
in the Use synonyms
last
4 weeks, the most purchasing amount accounted for Hobart nearly 55% Linking Words
however
, Linking Words
this
figure decreased for Linking Words
people
in Brisbane by around 53%. Use synonyms
While
the percentage of the public who purchased instant Linking Words
coffee
in Adelaide was 50%. Use synonyms
Similarly
, Linking Words
this
trend had a decrease for Linking Words
people
in Melbourne and Sydney and those were 48% and 45%, respectively. Use synonyms
Finally
, the percentage of individuals who went to a café in Hobart was as much as that of Melbourne around 63%. Linking Words
This
café lovers trend decreased to 61% for Linking Words
people
in Sydney. Use synonyms
Whereas
, Linking Words
people
from Brisbane and Adelaide went to a café less often and these percentages were approximately 55% and 49%, respectively.Use synonyms
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