The following diagrams show a current map of Peyton park and a plan for proposed changes.

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The plans illustrate visual data about the current plan of a particular

airport

, and how it is aimed to be designed after next year’s reconstruction plan.

Overall

, the

airport

is going to be expanded, and it will have more facilities. If we look at the current plan, the

airport

has 8 gates, and passengers have to walk to reach them.

In contrast

, 10 more gates will be constructed there,

as well as

a sky train to transfer

people

. Now,

people

are not able to buy something

while

waiting at the

airport

, but some shops will be introduced in the place

people

would wait for security and passport control, on their way to the departure site. After having their passport checked,

people

have no place to drop their bags, but one is planned to be placed in the departure part. The check-in counter will be moved to the current location of the cafe, in order to make room for the bag-dropping area. The current cafe will

also

be shifted to the southern area of the departure site. Those

people

who get off the plane will have access to an ATM.

In addition

, a new cafe will be built in the arrival area.

Finally

, in one year, they will be able to hire a car, since there will be an introduction of a car hire place after the development

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The following diagrams show a current map of Peyton park and a plan for proposed changes.

many people work long hours,leaving very little time for leisure activities.Does this situation have more advantages or disadvantages?

In recent years foreign visitors should be charged more than local. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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