The following diagrams show a current map of Peyton park and a plan for proposed changes.

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The plans illustrate visual data about the current plan of a particular

airport

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, and how it is aimed to be designed after next year’s reconstruction plan.

Overall

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, the

airport

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is going to be expanded, and it will have more facilities. If we look at the current plan, the

airport

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has 8 gates, and passengers have to walk to reach them.

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, 10 more gates will be constructed there,

as well as

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a sky train to transfer

people

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. Now,

people

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are not able to buy something

while

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waiting at the

airport

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, but some shops will be introduced in the place

people

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would wait for security and passport control, on their way to the departure site. After having their passport checked,

people

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have no place to drop their bags, but one is planned to be placed in the departure part. The check-in counter will be moved to the current location of the cafe, in order to make room for the bag-dropping area. The current cafe will

also

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be shifted to the southern area of the departure site. Those

people

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who get off the plane will have access to an ATM.

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, a new cafe will be built in the arrival area.

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, in one year, they will be able to hire a car, since there will be an introduction of a car hire place after the development

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words airport, people with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

227 words

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The following diagrams show a current map of Peyton park and a plan for proposed changes.

Many countries raise fuel prices to deal successfully with problems of traffic and polluon. What effects do you think this move can have? What other measures do you think can be taken to reduce traffic and pollution ?

Some companies use a lot of packaging when selling their products. Why is this? Is it a good thing?