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Many people hold the view that it is better to buy their home rather than rent it .Do you agree with this satement or not ?

#people #home #rent #satement
Majority
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The majority
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 of
people
 think that renting
home
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a home
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 is worse than buying
own
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their own
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 home.
This
 essay
agree
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agrees
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 completely with
this
 opinion. The writer will demonstrate
benefits
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the benefits
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 of two opinions. On the one hand, renting a
house
also
 has
benefits
with
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for
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life
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the life
a life
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 of
people
.
Money
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The money
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 cost
for
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of
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 a
house
 each month is cheaper than buying a
house
 immediately. Employees or workers can spend living costs every month, so some
people
choice
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choose
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 hiring
a
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an
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accomodation
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accommodation
.
For example
, most of
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the labors
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labors
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labourers
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 work at companies which are remote residential
ares
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area
areas
 so finding a suitable
house
 is difficult. In some
case
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cases
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, they are not enough financial to own a
house
. Personally, I think it is only
a expenditure
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expenditure
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 in
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the short-term
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short-term
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short term
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.
On the other hand
, owning a
house
 is
long-term
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a long-term
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 plant of resident life. Living
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in a
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a
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your
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 own place, you will be
freedom
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free
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 without
chaindown
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chain down
. Having a
house
 is not depend on
monthly
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a monthly
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 payment for
house
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a house
the house
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 and demonstrate your fortune.
Nowaday
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Nowadays
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,
people
 have to pay higher prices for food, accommodation and transportation so
have
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having
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 a personal situation is very confident and
have
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has
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long term
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long-term
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benefits
. Owning a private
house
 is in the hope of having a better life, you can leave them as an inheritance to pass on to your own children. In conclusion, renting a
house
 or owning a place to live has its own
benefits
, depending on the needs and
economic
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economics
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 of each person.
Moreover
 buying a
house
 is make sure safety and comfortable for
people
. In my opinion, owning a
house
still
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is still
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 the first choice.

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