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Many people say that the use of animals for the purpose of experiments is cruel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement.

#people #animals #purpose #experiments
It is
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sad
 but true that animal testing is
an
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inevitable for
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the benefits
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benefits
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benefit
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 of mankind
however
 utilizing
animal
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animals
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 is unwise and improper in many ways. I strongly agree that it is unjustified and
creul
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cruel
 to use
animals
 for experiments.
This
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further
 elaborate
my
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 views. some people believe using
animals
 in any kind of process is barbaric . In some
case
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its
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 ethically wrong because of some spiritual reasons . Other than that , they
also
 feel the pain
while
undergo
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 some extreme
procedure
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.
In addition
 , some cosmetic companies use animal
plecenta
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placenta
 for
ageing
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the ageing
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 process which is
unethicall
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unethical
unethically
 and brutal. To, exemplify , cosmetic
comapny
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company
 uses
animal's
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animal
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 skin to make branded shoes and jackets which is not right . analysing and explaining
further
 ,
animals
 are important to maintain our ecosystem. They play a vital role in
chain
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 of
food
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 chain
also
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for
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 biodiversity.
Moreover
 in some research scientists give some drugs to experiment if
it
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 will affect human in
good
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 way or not and
beacause
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because
 of
this
 unknown drug
animals
 suffer and sometimes it get them killed. For
an
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example , many
animlas
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animals
 got killed by some
lethel
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lethal
other
 drugs
while
research
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the research
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 process in
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 during
pandemic
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a pandemic
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.
On the other
hand
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 some people hold the opinion that it is important for
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the devleopment
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devleopment
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development
 of science. some says that
aimals
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animals
 are less valuable than human and because human and
animals
 are similar in many ways
its
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 beneficial to do
exeperiment
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experiment
experiments
 on animal rather humans. To illustrate, during covid time , experiments had done
chamapnzee
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chimpanzee
chimpanzees
 for
vaccine
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 and it got
succsessful
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successful
which
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way there were
many
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 life saved by that vaccine so its inevitable. To summarise , testing on
animal
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animals
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 is unjustified in many ways as its
noth
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not
 ethically right
as well as
its
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brutal .
However
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 using
animals
 in
medical
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the medical
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trial
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trials
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 should be permitted if there is no alternative but for
cosmetic
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the cosmetic
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 industry
its
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 should be strictly banned.
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