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The char illustrate distance traveled per person per week in term 5 types of transport in the uk between 1990 and 2000

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The bar
chat
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chart
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 explains the distance travelled per person per week in terms of 5 types of transport in the
uk
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UK
.
such
 as bicycle ,motorbike
air
, bus and rail between 1990 and 2000 .the horizontal Axis shows the types of travel and the vertical Axis shows the kilometres . According to the bar graph ,in 1990 more
people
 visited the travel system was a bus that was 40
km
 .30
km
 travelled by rail .It was more than
the
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bicycles motorbikes and
air
 .In 1990 ,below the 20
km
 travelled
on
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air
 by
people
.
On the other hand
 , in 2000, the majority of
people
 visited by bus .The kilometres were 45km. which is more than the rail,
air
,motorbike and bicycle travelled systems.
The
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 minority of
people
 travelled by bicycle.
Overall
 , in 1990,total transport system usage was less than the in 2000 transport vehicles.In 1990,
total
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the total
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 distance travelled was 100km by
people
 and in 2000, the total distance visited
around
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 110
km
.
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