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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chat provides information on how people who don't work in the UK make use of their time during the year before.
Overall
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, the table compares different activities which the unemployed do during the day.
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, it provides a comparison of how men and women spend their time. It can be seen that both genders prefer to accomplish all the outdoor missions in the morning;
however
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, spending the afternoon doing various activities.
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, 22% of morning men usually use
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job hunting,
whereas
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 the proportion dramatically decreased to 2% as they just drank.
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, morning women who do the housework are at the peak with approximately half per cent of them,
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 around 1% play sports
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 drinking. Regarding afternoon tasks, only 14% of men watch tv, followed by 13% in gardening.
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, the number has overwhelmingly decreased to 1% remained in bed. Women, controversy, go shopping and vesting friends by just under one-fifth.

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