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many people think that buy their home is better than rent it. do you agree or disagree?

#people #home #rent
Some people believe that everybody who
buy
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 their
home
 is more relaxed than
rent
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renting
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 it. In my opinion, I agree with
this
 point and will give the reason why in the following essay. On the one hand, buying has almost always been
favored
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 over renting when it comes to housing because of the housing facilities when you own a
home
such
 as
lifestyle
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, age, work situation, desired location, and readiness to settle down for the long haul. When you get a
house
, you can not only decorate your room but
also
 ornament the whole
house
 in your style, you can do whatever you'd like to the
house
 you own, from full remodels to painting the walls. You'll have a lot more flexibility in all of these things, and for many, that's a seriously appealing part of buying your
home
.
On the other hand
, the family which
have
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 a
house
 will be more stable and familiar. If you
a
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house
, you can do everything you like and it is very comfortable for you to invite your friends when you have
the
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a
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 party or
the
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an
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 event. For some people, it is worth it to have the emotional connection to a
home
 you own, and a sense of stability that renting won't bring. When you have a
home
, you will have
a
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better security than if you rent and can't ensure when you meet a thief or have a problem.
To conclude
, I feel that owning a
home
 can be a pleasurable experience if done within a budget.
However
, it could turn into a negative situation when a person buys a
home
 by getting a loan
that is
 way beyond his repaying capacity.
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