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People should keep all the money they earn and should not pay tax to the state. Agree or disagree ?

#people #money #tax
It is a moral responsibility that everyone should
pays
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pay
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 their
taxs
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taxes
tax
 to their government.
However
, some
induvegul
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induvial
 believe that we should take our all earning money and don't need to pay any tax to the authority. I
am not agree
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do not agree
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 with
this
giben
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given
 statement. I will explain why we should pay
tax
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taxes
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 to our nation. A
country
 can use the
taxes
for
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to
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devoloping
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developing
 their
national
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nation
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.
Firstly
, education is very
crucal
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crucial
 for a nation which is
desarve
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deserve
 to get every
persone
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person
 but
sometime
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sometimes
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 it's not possible to take for everyone.
Thus
 government can invest
the
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in the
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 payment
taxes
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of taxes
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 for their students.
Moreover
, most of the time government had
not
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no
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 option to
making
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make
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 without
taxes
.They can not do crucial work for their
country
.
For example
, in a
country
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,country
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 they need to
making
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make
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road
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roads
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 for
transport
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the transport
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 system and necessary to
developed
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develop
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 their medical equipment.
Thus
, the money which
is came
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comes
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 from
taxes
.
Furthermore
, there are lots of needy people
lived
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living
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 in a
country
. They need
helps
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help
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for
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to
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 leaving their life but they don't have any option to take their rights so it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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for
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of
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authority
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the authority
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 to
helps
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help
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 them by giving
their
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them their
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 basic needs. If we want to help them we need to help them by paying our
taxes
. In Conclusion, paying
taxes
 is a moral responsibility for everyone. In
the
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this
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 way we, can help to
making
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make
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 a developed
country
 and helps
them
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those
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 who are unprevalage.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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