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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is a commonly debated topic whether adopt bad
conditions
for example
 an unsatisfactory occupation and saving money or try to enhance and improve several situations. In the following ,paragraphs I will present my perspectives on both topics. There are two key reasons why
people
 argue that accepting bad
conditions
 is a valuable way.
Firstly
, change in walks of life may be quite hard for somebody,
for instance
, finding a new work's position is a difficult pattern.
Secondly
, nowadays
people
 are under pressure and they are dealing with various problems to make money so they are busy and do not have suitable time to surf the net, read magazines or contact managers to find a perfect solution.
This
 point of view can be observed especially in undeveloped countries
such
 as Iran or Venezuela.
However
, I agree with those who argue that we should try to change bad
conditions
, make good feelings and better atmosphere. " Just trying to build a better life can improve the mood and convert the human mind to a winning mind in youth", was said by American Society Psychologists. What's more, if you are satisfied with your job you can save more money or when you have good neighbours they will help you with your future problems. In ,conclusion dealing with bad situations is a controversial topic. Some
people
 contend that accepting bad
conditions
 is the best way but I believe that trying to change awful
conditions
 helps
to
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minds and makes
people
 satisfied with life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
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