You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
The line graph illustrates how many people from different areas participated in
basketball
, Use synonyms
tennis
, Use synonyms
badminton
and rugby from 1985 to 2005, a period of Use synonyms
20years
.
Correct your spelling
20 years
Overall
, Linking Words
it is clear that
Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
participation
in rugby dramatically declined, Use synonyms
while
the number of individuals in Linking Words
tennis
increased over the period. But Use synonyms
Correct your spelling
participation
iparticipation
in Correct your spelling
participation
badminton
and Use synonyms
basketball
steady Use synonyms
ramainded
In 1985, The most popular sport among Correct your spelling
remained
indiviuals
was Correct your spelling
individuals
rughby
, Correct your spelling
rugby
begin
participated 250 Correct pronoun usage
which begin
person
.
Fix the agreement mistake
people
This
was far higher than Linking Words
basketball
and Use synonyms
badminton
, which were under the number of 100, Use synonyms
while
Linking Words
participation
in Use synonyms
tennis
was just 150. The number of Use synonyms
Use synonyms
participation
in Replace the word
participants
rughby
dramatical declined over the Correct your spelling
rugby
20 year
timescale of finish at just 50, Add a hyphen
20-year
was
Correct pronoun usage
which was
tha
same with Correct your spelling
the
badminton
.
In sharp contrast to Use synonyms
this
, Linking Words
participation
in Use synonyms
tennis
increased gradually until it Use synonyms
over took
Correct your spelling
overtook
rughby
in 1995. It Correct your spelling
rugby
then
rose roughly 220 in 2005, Linking Words
by
Linking Words
contrast
Add a comma
,contrast
attendcy
of people for Correct your spelling
attendance
attend
badminton
and Use synonyms
basketball
did not change over the period.Use synonyms
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words basketball, tennis, badminton, participation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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