The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009.

The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009.
The tables illustrate the
number
of foreign transfer
students
from universities in Europe and Australia between 2007 and 2009.
Overall
, what stands out from the data is that the average of European
students
experienced growth,
while
students
from Australia remain unchanged. On the one hand, in both years
majority
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of European
students
came from France,
while
the least
number
of transfers came from Germany.
However
, by 2009 the
number
of
students
from
Fermany
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Germany
doubled from 27 to 62, respectively.
Moreover
,
students
from
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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remain unchanged.
On the other hand
,
majority
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the majority
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of
students
from Australia went to France in 2007,
then
the
number
almost doubled in 2009 from 37 to 58.
Moreover
, Germany experienced an increase
of
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in
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students
from 18 to 26. That said, the Netherlands saw a notable decrease in admission from 32 to 18.
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