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The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009.

The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009.
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The tables illustrate the
number
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 of foreign transfer
students
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 from universities in Europe and Australia between 2007 and 2009.
Overall
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, what stands out from the data is that the average of European
students
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 experienced growth,
while
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students
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 from Australia remain unchanged. On the one hand, in both years
majority
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the majority
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 of European
students
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 came from France,
while
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 the least
number
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 of transfers came from Germany.
However
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, by 2009 the
number
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 of
students
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 from
Fermany
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Germany
 doubled from 27 to 62, respectively.
Moreover
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,
students
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 from
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 remain unchanged.
On the other hand
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,
majority
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the majority
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 of
students
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 from Australia went to France in 2007,
then
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 the
number
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 almost doubled in 2009 from 37 to 58.
Moreover
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, Germany experienced an increase
of
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in
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students
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 from 18 to 26. That said, the Netherlands saw a notable decrease in admission from 32 to 18.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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