Writing Task 1 The bar chart shows the number of hours worked by men & women per week in Australia in 2007. Summarise information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar graph illustrates the percentage of utilized time for working by Australian male and female employees during a
week
in 2007.
Overall
, the reports show that Australian men
spent more hours
occupying a week
rather than women
. Both genders spent their most between 30-50 hours
a week
in their working fields, whereas
equally consumed time over 80 hours
for gaining money.
To begin
with, in the year 2007, less than a fifth of women
had a job with 0-10 working hours
while
a minimal percentage of men
had the same job conditions. Similarly
, in the 10-20 hours
, with over a fifth of females and approximately 12% of males.
However
, the situation changed in contrast
, when these two Australian genders had 30-50 hours
of work. In this
group, over two-fifths of men
were working in a week
, almost 8% more than women
with 35%. Although
the male population was again greater than women
in working conditions with 60-80 hours
per week
, the total percentage had dropped significantly for both of them. Men
's working duration was 30% while
women
spent about 18% in this
situation. Moreover
, one in ten males and females in Australia had spent over 80 hours
in their jobs in a week
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Vocabulary: Replace the words week, men, hours, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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