The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. 

Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the steps
how
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bricks
are produced for
building
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the building
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industry.
Overall
, the process consists
seven
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steps digging, rolling, moulding,drying, cooling, packaging and delivering. Beginning with digging the clay and ending up with
delivery
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the final
bricks
to the market.
The first step is
to
digging
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the clay
by
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with
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digger
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a digger
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then
,
clay
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the clay
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is
to
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apply
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filtered and processed in
roller
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a roller
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machine and
next
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the next
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step is to
mixed
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with sand and water
then
, give shape to the
bricks
by cutting
it
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them
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with
wire
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a wire
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cutter or
by
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be
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kept in a mould after that
trasnfered
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transferred
the raw shape
bricks
to
oven
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the oven
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for drying for 24 to 48 hrs. Once
drying
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the drying
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process is done the. Put the dried
bricks
into the kiln
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at
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both moderate and high temperature up to 1300 degrees Celsius
then
placed the
bricks
in to
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cooling chamber for 48 to 72 hrs.
now
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finally
bricks
is prepared for packaging and ready to deliver
in
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to
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the market.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks with synonyms.
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