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The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the steps
how
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of how
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bricks
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 are produced for
building
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the building
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 industry.
Overall
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, the process consists
seven
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of seven
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 steps digging, rolling, moulding,drying, cooling, packaging and delivering. Beginning with digging the clay and ending up with
delivery
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delivering
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 the final
bricks
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 to the market.
The first step is
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 to
digging
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dig
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 the clay
by
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with
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digger
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a digger
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then
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,
clay
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the clay
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 is
to
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apply
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filtered and processed in
roller
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a roller
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 machine and
next
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the next
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 step is to
mixed
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 with sand and water
then
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, give shape to the
bricks
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 by cutting
it
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them
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 with
wire
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a wire
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 cutter or
by
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be
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 kept in a mould after that
trasnfered
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transferred
 the raw shape
bricks
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 to
oven
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the oven
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 for drying for 24 to 48 hrs. Once
drying
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the drying
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 process is done the. Put the dried
bricks
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 into the kiln
in
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at
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 both moderate and high temperature up to 1300 degrees Celsius
then
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 placed the
bricks
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in to
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into
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 cooling chamber for 48 to 72 hrs.
now
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Now
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finally
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bricks
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 is prepared for packaging and ready to deliver
in
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to
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 the market.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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