The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration depicts the contrast in temperature between tropical
mountains
and temperate
mountains
.
Overall
, what stands out from the data is that
,
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the altitude of the temperate
mountain
is higher than a tropical
mountain
from sea base
level
.
According to
the data,
warm
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the warm
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zone
of tropical
mountains
, where various
kind
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kinds
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of crops can be planted is at 500 meters above sea
level
,
while
cool
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the cool
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zone
of temperate
mountains
, where cultivation of grains etc, is under 5000 feet above sea
level
.
Moreover
, the cool
zone
of a tropical
mountain
is at the
level
of approximately 3000 metres, where possible grain cultivation
occured
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occurs
. The forests’
altitude
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for both differ,
this
spot is the limitation for the growth of the
broad leaf
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trees. Tropic is
at-least
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3500,
while
temperate
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the temperate
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mountain
is at 6000, respectively. In more detail, the position of the snow line, the permanent snow for tropical
mountains
and temperate
mountains
is at 5500 metres and above 12000 feet, respectively. It is
also
notable, that temperate
mountains
do not have a temperature
zone
used for coffee and cocoa
plantation
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plantations
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,
as well as
a warm
zone
.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words mountains, mountain, level, zone with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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