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The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustration depicts the contrast in temperature between tropical
mountains
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 and temperate
mountains
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.
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, what stands out from the data is that
,
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 the altitude of the temperate
mountain
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 is higher than a tropical
mountain
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 from sea base
level
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According to
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 the data,
warm
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the warm
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zone
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 of tropical
mountains
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, where various
kind
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kinds
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 of crops can be planted is at 500 meters above sea
level
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,
while
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cool
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the cool
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zone
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 of temperate
mountains
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, where cultivation of grains etc, is under 5000 feet above sea
level
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.
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, the cool
zone
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 of a tropical
mountain
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 is at the
level
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 of approximately 3000 metres, where possible grain cultivation
occured
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occurs
. The forests’
altitude
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altitudes
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 for both differ,
this
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 spot is the limitation for the growth of the
broad leaf
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broad-leaf
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 trees. Tropic is
at-least
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at least
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 3500,
while
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temperate
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the temperate
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mountain
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 is at 6000, respectively. In more detail, the position of the snow line, the permanent snow for tropical
mountains
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 and temperate
mountains
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 is at 5500 metres and above 12000 feet, respectively. It is
also
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 notable, that temperate
mountains
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 do not have a temperature
zone
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 used for coffee and cocoa
plantation
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plantations
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,
as well as
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 a warm
zone
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mountains, mountain, level, zone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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