The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration depicts the contrast in temperature between tropical
mountains
and temperate mountains
.
Overall
, what stands out from the data is that,
the altitude of the temperate Remove the comma
apply
mountain
is higher than a tropical mountain
from sea base level
.
According to
the data, warm
Correct article usage
the warm
zone
of tropical mountains
, where various kind
of crops can be planted is at 500 meters above sea Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
level
, while
cool
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the cool
zone
of temperate mountains
, where cultivation of grains etc, is under 5000 feet above sea level
. Moreover
, the cool zone
of a tropical mountain
is at the level
of approximately 3000 metres, where possible grain cultivation occured
. The forests’ Correct your spelling
occurs
altitude
for both differ, Fix the agreement mistake
altitudes
this
spot is the limitation for the growth of the broad leaf
trees. Tropic is Add a hyphen
broad-leaf
at-least
3500, Correct your spelling
at least
while
temperate
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the temperate
mountain
is at 6000, respectively.
In more detail, the position of the snow line, the permanent snow for tropical mountains
and temperate mountains
is at 5500 metres and above 12000 feet, respectively. It is also
notable, that temperate mountains
do not have a temperature zone
used for coffee and cocoa plantation
, Fix the agreement mistake
plantations
as well as
a warm zone
.Submitted by Anneya
on
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