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This
chart shows the amount
of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales in the period Change the quantifier
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1918 to 2011.
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Overall
, it can be seen that the number of households in owned accommodation has
increased in the duration of 1918 to 2001 Unnecessary verb
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then
dropped in 2011. Conversely
, the percentage of households in rented accommodation has
decreased from 1918 to 2001 and it raised in 2011.
In 1918, the number of Unnecessary verb
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household
owning increased from 22% to 32% and stayed Change to a plural noun
households
in
the same Change preposition
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in 1953; Replace the word
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however
, it has raised around 8% each year until 2001 which
reached Correct word choice
when
to
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the
peak and represented 68%. Ten years later, it dropped to 64% in 2011.
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In contrast
, the number of household
rented was on its top which represented 78% in 1918 and it decreased to 68% and stayed in the same amount until 1953. Change to a plural noun
households
Therefore
, it dropped 10% each year. In 2001, it represented 30% then
it increased to over 35% in 2011.Submitted by zoe20130402 on
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