The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summa se the info ation selecting and repo ing the main features, and make compa ons e relevant.

The chart  below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

Summa se the info ation   selecting and repo ing the main features, and make compa ons  e  relevant.
This
chart shows the
amount
Change the quantifier
number
show examples
of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales in the period
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
1918 to 2011.
Overall
, it can be seen that the number of households in owned accommodation
has
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
increased in the duration of 1918 to 2001
then
dropped in 2011.
Conversely
, the percentage of households in rented accommodation
has
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
decreased from 1918 to 2001 and it raised in 2011. In 1918, the number of
household
Change to a plural noun
households
show examples
owning increased from 22% to 32% and stayed
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
the same
percent
Replace the word
percentage
show examples
in 1953;
however
, it has raised around 8% each year until 2001
which
Correct word choice
when
show examples
reached
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
peak and represented 68%. Ten years later, it dropped to 64% in 2011.
In contrast
, the number of
household
Change to a plural noun
households
show examples
rented was on its top which represented 78% in 1918 and it decreased to 68% and stayed in the same amount until 1953.
Therefore
, it dropped 10% each year. In 2001, it represented 30%
then
it increased to over 35% in 2011.
Submitted by zoe20130402 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Housing tenure
  • Owned accommodation
  • Rented accommodation
  • Percentage
  • Trend
  • Shift in ownership
  • Historical context
  • Housing market
  • Housing policy
  • Post-war
  • Property ladder
  • Economic factors
  • Demographic changes
  • Mortgages
  • Real estate
  • Housing bubble
  • Buy-to-let
  • Housing affordability
  • Social housing
What to do next:
Look at other essays: