The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph provides information on how people bought their hot drinks in five leading States of Australia (
Brisbane
, Sydney, Melbourne, Adelaide and
Hobart
) over the
last
4 weeks.
Overall
, it shows that all States were least likely to buy fresh
coffee
during the timeframe.
Firstly
, looking at the chart, all cities had low numbers for buying fresh
coffee
, with Melbourne and
Hobart
having the highest value at around 63% and
Brisbane
with the lowest value at around 35%. Meanwhile, the other three cities range from approximately 45% to 50%.
In addition
to
this
, all locations chose to buy hot drinks at the cafe over instant
coffee
, except
Brisbane
and
Hobart
, at 50%.
Furthermore
, only around 42% of Sydneysiders, which had the lowest rating, bought instant
coffee
over the
last
four weeks.
Similarly
, only around 49% of Melbournian liked it.
Lastly
, based on the chart, buying hot drinks
such
as
coffee
and tea, was very popular in all locations except Adelaide. At least 60% of
Hobart
and Melbourne's people went and had their hot beverages outside.
This
number is followed by Sydney at 60% and
Brisbane
at approximately 53%.
Nonetheless
, only just below 40% of Adelaide preferred it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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