The pie charts compare the proportion of the trend in using water in six areas all over the world in term of three different categories

The pie charts compare the proportion of the trend in using water in six areas all over the world in term of three different categories
The graphs illustrate the comparison of
water
usage in three categories (industrial, agricultural or domestic use) in six leading countries.
Overall
, it shows that agriculture and industrial uses are the most needed categories of all countries. Looking at the chart, it can be seen that 4 out of 6 nations
such
as South
America
, Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
, used their
water
for agriculture. Among these places, Central
Asia
had the most
water
usage at 88%, which is followed by Africa at 84%. Not far from behind, 81% of SouthEast Asian
water
also
goes to
this
sector. In a similar fashion, following that, all of them, except South East
Asia
, needed the resources for domestic use, with South
America
having the highest number (19%)
while
Central
Asia
was the lowest (7%).
In contrast
, two nations
such
as North
America
and Europe mostly supplied their
water
for the industry sector.
While
more than half of European
water
is used for
this
sector,
similarly
, just under half of North American
water
is used the same way.
Lastly
, these places
also
had a similar trend with the remaining usage of the resources. Both of them had their second demand for agriculture, with North
America
at 39% and Europe at 32%. Their demands for domestic use were
also
similar, at 13% and 15%, respectively.
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