The table below gives information on UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.

The table below gives information on UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.
The given table presents
acid
rain
emissions in the UK ( in the unit of
million
tonnes
) in 4 sectors which are transport and communication, domestic, electricity gas and water supply , and other industries in 1990 and 2007.
Firstly
, there was
the
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dramatic fall in
acid
rain
from 3.25
million
tonnes
in 1990 to just 0.5
million
tonnes
in 2007.
Similarly
, the
rain
acid
in other industries dropped slowly from about 2
million
tonnes
to 1.25
million
tonnes
between the
year
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years
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1990 and 2007.
Furthermore
, the
rain
acid
in
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domestic has
also
fallen slightly from over 0.5
million
tonnes
to around 0.25
million
tonnes
from 1990 to 2007.
On the other hand
, the raid
acid
in transport and communication rose slowly. In 1990, it was about 0.6
million
tonnes
but in 2005 it rose to 1
million
tonnes
. In the end, it decreased back to about 0.6
million
tonnes
.
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