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The table below gives information on UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.

The table below gives information on UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007.
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The given table presents
acid
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rain
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 emissions in the UK ( in the unit of
million
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tonnes
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) in 4 sectors which are transport and communication, domestic, electricity gas and water supply , and other industries in 1990 and 2007.
Firstly
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, there was
the
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 dramatic fall in
acid
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rain
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 from 3.25
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990 to just 0.5
million
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tonnes
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 in 2007.
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, the
rain
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acid
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 in other industries dropped slowly from about 2
million
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tonnes
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 to 1.25
million
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tonnes
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 between the
year
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 1990 and 2007.
Furthermore
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, the
rain
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acid
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in
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domestic has
also
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 fallen slightly from over 0.5
million
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tonnes
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 to around 0.25
million
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tonnes
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 from 1990 to 2007.
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, the raid
acid
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 in transport and communication rose slowly. In 1990, it was about 0.6
million
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tonnes
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 but in 2005 it rose to 1
million
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tonnes
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. In the end, it decreased back to about 0.6
million
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tonnes
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words acid, rain, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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