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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The given plans represent the change of a Grance public
park
 from 1920 until now.
Overall
, many facilities in the
park
 are changed, formed and demolished. In detail, the fountain which is placed between two entrances disappeared and changed to the rose garden, surrounded by four seats. Next to
this
 change, the stage for musicians in 1920 turned into the amphitheatre, the place where concerts are held. There were three rose gardens in the
park
 in 1920,
while
 only one left and another one disappeared and the other changed to the cafeteria. In the case of the pond where water plants grew up became the children’s play area.
Also
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 the glasshouse was turned into the water feature
instead
 of the pond in 1920. After five seats on each side of the
park
 are demolished, the entrance to the underground parking place is formed at the right side of the water feature.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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